pretty good. I like it, but you could word it better.
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this is pretty good! I like it!
the good thing is that it isn't just a bunch of ryming words it shows a certain story with a good moral.
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Thanks for the coment. I try to but meaning into poem I write also, nothing like a big glob of meaningless worlds to bore you into eating your own shoe.